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 “In a secret city beneath the streets of Jacksonville”…….. there are so many surprises to expect in a secret city beneath the city. One day some friends found the secret city while they were exploring for something new. There were 4 teens. The kids are all at the age of 15. Two were girls. The girl’s names were Teresa and Spirit. The rest were boys. And their names were Cette and Max. They were exploring together and found a entrance to a hall next to Spirit's house. Spirit said she was to scared to go in and her friends egged her to go with them and she said "All right guys". And they said "Yes". Literally at the same time.
When they entered the hall they found it very dusty and worn down as if it had never been used. Teresa said “It so dusty in here" then "Achoo" she sneezed. Then, they all said "bless you". She said "Thank You". Then after a few feet they saw a very bright light. Cette asked "What is that bright light?". So they kept going toward the light and they found another city beneath their very own city.
When they entered the city they found there were people living in the city without knowing they were underneath another city. When they ask someone where they were they said they were in the city of Amber. This city is like the greatest thing they ever saw. They asked if there were any empty houses they could stay in and the citizens said ask the Mayor, he lives in the middle of the city. The teens said thank you and went to find the Mayor in the middle of the secret city of Amber.
Cette and Spirit were actually jumping with excitement because they never met someone this important. While Max, and Teresa were so nervous that they would not stop shaking. Yet they were still excited. When they reached the Mayor's office they were anxious but still went inside.......where they found the Mayor of Amber City. The Mayor was very tall and slim. And the mayor was actually a woman not a man. "She might as well have been the nicest mayor I have ever met" said Cette. "But she is the only mayor you have met" said Spirit. "So theirs nothing wrong with that" said Cette. "Stop talking about it and be quiet" said Max. Then as they started arguing the Mayor stepped in, and as she was about to say something they started apolizing with each other. When they were done there was an awkward silence until the mayor said "You 4 are really close I can see?" The 4 friends said “Yes, because we have known each other since we were really young". The mayor was really proud to see the friendship between these friends. "What brought you friends to my office?" said the Mayor. Spirit said "We need to know if you hade any empty houses we could crash for the night?”  “I believe so but don't you live here already?" said the mayor. “No we do not live here. We live in the city above you. We were exploring when we found your city. We just needed a place to stay so we can head home in the morning. But we will defiantly still visit." said Spirit. "Nice Job" whispered Teresa. "Thanks" Spirit answered. The Mayor was silent for a while until she said "Sure thing. But I will miss you until your next visit. Your temporary house will be yours for your next visit. It is located on by the place you entered our city". The mayor said “Oh I almost forgot my name is Deja White". "Thank you Ms. White" said the friends. So when they left Ms. White’s office they went to the house they were given.
It was quite a long walk but other-wise ok.  When they got to the house it was two stories, already furnished, had 4 bedrooms (upstairs) , a living room, a kitchen, 3 bathrooms (two upstairs, one downstairs), 1 closet down   stairs, and a patio with a very large fenced backyard. When they finished looking around they each went to their rooms and found clothes already in the drawers. They changed and went down to see what was to eat in the kitchen and found the cupboards, refrigerator, and pantry full of delicious food of many types. So they found their favorite foods and sat down to eat dinner. After their satisfying dinner they each got ready for bed and fell asleep with satisfied stomachs in their new home located in the city of Amber.
The next morning they got up changed and went down for some breakfast. After their delicious meal they got their stuff and closed the house until their next visit, and set out to return to their homes.
This was an entry for a short story contest I entered to try and win comment and please tell me what you think. :eager: by darkmoon3636
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Lizbeth-Lund Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Awesome!
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Spirit-The-Artist Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thx
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Lizbeth-Lund Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Welcome! :D.
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Spirit-The-Artist Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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Lizbeth-Lund Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:giggle:
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Spirit-The-Artist Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ok thx I guess
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GokuMartin Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014
You story reminds me of that movie...
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Spirit-The-Artist Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh lol
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